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From birth we are dealt our cards
As we grow some people hide behind poker faces
Concealing their real selves
Others can not lie
Blushing at every ante
Time passes, and you are dealt new cards
Friends, lovers
or pain and sickness
I have a pair
All the chips are in
Either I win or i die
But as usual i lose
Beaten by a group of kings
Once again my cards are out shined
©2004-2009 ~life-and-death
:iconlife-and-death:

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Im bored out of my mind so im going to make a poem up as i go

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:iconjennadoggy:
This is really good. It really is what life is like. Good job, keep up the good work ^-^

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I don't suffer from insanity, I enjoy every minute of it.
:iconself-indulgence:
well, I think its good, I can't really critique this because i'm not a poet. but from what I can tell, its really good!
:iconnocturnal-creations:
Very true, very true, my only suggestion is the spelling of "selfs" to "selves" :)

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"Name your god and bleed the freak!"

"If there's one thing you can do, it's bleed for me BLEED FOR ME!"
:iconinmyroom:
i love the theme.
:iconsqueakingshoeless:
very very cool. only crit: cannot is one word, as is outshined. otherwise, another great work, despite your boredom ^_^

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A conclusion is simply the place where someone got tired of thinking. -Arthur Block
:iconembers-of-stitches:
this is a ver cool perspective on life! i love it! i think i am about to be beaten too... i only got two of a kind and it aint looking good :giggle:
:iconciara06:
Awesome comparison, never thought of things like that. Hmm...cool. :thumbsup:

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"Keep your friends close and your enemies in a BBQ pit." Nines Rodriguez "VTM"
I'm a part of the DAPride community and Care-Club.
:iconanalye:
So ture.. and So painful to understand.

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ashİ
:iconkaylazelda:
Intresting way to interprete fate. SqueakingShoeless said just about the same as for word edits.

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I fell in love with food. Is that such a sin?

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