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Shattered Tides, Broken Dreams by ~life-and-death:iconlife-and-death:



The broken tides flow
washing in the shattered hopes
back to those who dream.

I sit here, on the edge,
listening to the waves,
watching just over the horizon.

My hopes diffused,
lost in the waters
seeming never to come back.

Tears from my own eyes,
streak down the beach sands
adding to the oceanic waters.

As time passes,
I keep within my mind
the solitary thought

The broken tides flow
washing in the shattered hopes
back to those who dream.
©2005-2009 ~life-and-death
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:iconkarateangel:
what an amazing emotional poem. i like it. when i'm feeling sad, i write poems like these too. i am glad to share the same feelings with someone! :)

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~Broke the sissy boy's teeny toy heart in two
turned him into a video kid like you~


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:iconandromache:
i really like the imagery you use here. it's beautiful. i really like the way the first stanza is repeated. it really reinforces it.

--
Making your life pinker since 1987
:iconairysoul:
i love the first stanza. and it's repetition. nice use of it. i love the poem as well. can't quite get it, but it's deep. goood job.

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Poetry is my sanity.
My advice:
:D Be you, and don't let anyone tell you different. :D
:iconreji:
There are many poems I've read like this. I'd have to agree with previous comments, it is emotional, the imagery is good, and I could relate back to the poem.

I'd say more but I'm too lazy and my wrist hurts. (^^) either way, it was good.

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[ There's the door, if you ever want to leave]
:icontaken-in-fall:
what a moving poem!! it's beautiful
:iconguccipiggy8:
I just realized my comment on the Poem of the Week thingy was out of date... as in, I commented today and that has been up since november. So I'll write down what I commented there:

I really enjoy the redundancy in the first and last stanzas. It just comes full circle, sways, like waves on the beach. You stop focusing on what it being said and focus on the movements the words and rhythm evoke... to then realize it's what the poem tries to portray: being numb, ubiquitous, always there, to and fro, like waves on a beach. Great job.

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My thoughts are misguided and a little naive

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